Monument Soul

(this post is the first in a series of work based on metahphors and what they have taught me or what I think they stand for. Following the metaphor I ...

This poem sports an adequate metaphor. you did well but you should try a metaphor that's alittle more provacotive. I myself have written poem on hatred but I put in ...

Er...I liked the concept within itself (as in the story being told). I am just curious as to why you believed formatting and schemes were unnecessary? Punctuation and other grammar ...

On a Fickle-Fickle afternoon I reached up and pulled down a sickle blade moon I used it to harvest carbuncle blooms I had to put back the moon for it ...

they don't have to be lemon quips

( I know this is going to be horribly imperfect because this is an un-edited version so I don't want anybody to hold back, I just want to know if ...

I give you one nightmare, a mirage and a daydream :arrow: in that order. (three poems following three dreams that occured to me in the past) 1. Windmills Edge I ...

alright, this is some good storytelling, but I feel you add more realism to it. This is supposed to be a story abut Vashoa, but I'm not hearing that much ...

hmm... this is nothing less than the searing ignition to an engaging Historical fiction... the story of the boy with the burning heart and his companion, stoic and sweet lik ...

This is tells me everthing I need to know... I don't understand some of the details but I still like it... I don't like nit-picking so look elsewhere this is ...

nice... I'm glad you took the fre verse route with this literary composition antique rained in the region of the home due to a climate of contempt... but in another ...

In this world of darkness In this world of pain there is one who is always here for us. it is hatred hatred ,it provokes, thus forth it is provocative. ...

8) If it isn't my good friend God!!!.... let's see what you've got here... :? mhmmm :? mhmm :shock: :( .... :) this is good, it's true....it's simple and straight ...

:shock: This is something I would call "broken" the fact that you created this for school explains the inner poorness of this work. you should always be able to free ...

8) yeah, thar's what i'M talking about! I love the premise of the work and the scenery, I can't help but praise your ability to baptise the reader in the ...